[Cdd-commits] cdd/doc/common/en 07_starting.sgml,1.6,1.7

[Ben Armstrong]

Update of /cvsroot/cdd/cdd/doc/common/en
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Modified Files:
	07_starting.sgml 
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Grammar, etc.  Up to section on scope.


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RCS file: /cvsroot/cdd/cdd/doc/common/en/07_starting.sgml,v
retrieving revision 1.6
retrieving revision 1.7
diff -u -d -r1.6 -r1.7
--- 07_starting.sgml	18 Jun 2004 00:54:14 -0000	1.6
+++ 07_starting.sgml	18 Jun 2004 09:57:49 -0000	1.7
@@ -56,14 +56,14 @@
   </p>
   <p>
   Checking for cooperation with other Custom Debian Distributions is
-  always a good idea.  In technical terms this is obvious but
-  sometimes there are possibilities to share efforts by goals that have
-  parts in common.
+  always a good idea.  In technical terms, this is obvious, but
+  sometimes there are possibilities to share efforts when the goals
+  of two projects have parts in common.
   </p>
   <p>
-  Who decided to start a Custom Debian Distribution takes over a
+  The one who decides to start a Custom Debian Distribution takes on a
   responsibility for this project.  It has to be for the good of
-  Debian as a whole and should bring an extra reputation to our common
+  Debian as a whole, and should bring an extra reputation to our common
   goal to build the best operating system.
   </p>
  </sect1>