[Pkg-sugar-commit] [sugar-write-activity] 02/07: Modernize short and long description.

[Jonas Smedegaard]

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commit 79a7889d1576a86cbefca4fd68ab05fa55f0e94a
Author: Jonas Smedegaard <dr at jones.dk>
Date:   Thu Jun 18 18:26:46 2015 -0500

    Modernize short and long description.
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 debian/control.in | 26 +++++++++++++++++---------
 1 file changed, 17 insertions(+), 9 deletions(-)

diff --git a/debian/control.in b/debian/control.in
index d16e166..5c6ecd6 100644
--- a/debian/control.in
+++ b/debian/control.in
@@ -18,14 +18,22 @@ Depends: ${cdbs:Depends},
  python-abiword
 Recommends: sugar
 Provides: ${python:Provides}
-Description: Sugar Write Activity
- Sugar is a graphical user interface aimed at children.
+Description: Sugar Learning Platform - writing activity
+ Sugar Learning Platform promotes collaborative learning through Sugar
+ Activities that encourage critical thinking, the heart of a quality
+ education.  Designed from the ground up especially for children, Sugar
+ offers an alternative to traditional “office-desktop” software.
  .
- Originating as intregral part of the OLPC "XO" a.k.a. the $100 laptop,
- Sugar has since grown into a more widely usable low-resource desktop
- environment for kids.
+ Learner applications in Sugar are called Activities.  They are software
+ packages that automatically save your work - producing specific
+ instances of the Activity that can be resumed at a later time.  Many
+ Activities support learner collaboration, where multiple learners may
+ be invited to join a collective Activity session.
  .
- This package contains the Write activity. It providing basic text 
- editing facilities. Its simple interface provides an easy starting
- point for children, presenting tools that make writing a story, poem 
- or essay simple and straightforward
+ The Write activity serves as a basic text editing application.  Its
+ simple interface provides an easy starting point for children,
+ presenting tools that make writing a story, poem or essay simple and
+ straightforward.  It also supports basic tools for inserting images,
+ creating tables, and performing basic layout operations as children
+ begin to require some of these features often associated with word
+ processors.

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