[Popcon-developers] [RFR] Re: The number of etch installations is rocketing...

[MJ Ray]

Main changes:
1. Remove 's from numbers - should use either ,s or nbsp;
2. Capitalise headline the English way (was it German-way Noun-only before?);
3. Simplify opening paragraph;
4. Try to clarify third paragraph - unsure what it wanted to say;
5. Some small spelling and punctuation changes.


--- popcon-50000.wml	2007-05-21 21:33:08.000000000 +0100
+++ popcon-50000.wml.mod	2007-05-21 21:56:18.000000000 +0100
@@ -1,39 +1,39 @@
-<define-tag pagetitle>"popcon" hits 50'000 - Number of Debian Installations doubled?</define-tag>
+<define-tag pagetitle>"popcon" Hits 50 000 - Number of Debian Installations Doubled?</define-tag>
 <define-tag release_date>2007-05-21</define-tag>
 #use wml::debian::news
 
 <p>Nearly one month after the release of Debian GNU/Linux 4.0
-<q>etch</q>, the number of submissions to popularity-contest, a system
-allowing users to tell the developers which packages are in use, have
-reached an other milestone:  Sunday they reached the 50'000 mark.</p>
+<q>etch</q>, the popularity-contest system
+which reports package usage levels has
+reached another milestone: it received the 50 000th submission on Sunday.</p>
 
 <!-- FIXME:  ADD LINK TO ARTICLE ON times.debian.net -->
-<p>That's just two month after they reached the 30'000 milestone.</p>
+<p>That's just two months after it reached 30 000 submissions.</p>
 
-<p>Debian users can automatically submit information about the installed
-packages voluntarily (and anonymously).  While the main purpose to
-collect these information is to optimize DVD contents, prioritize
-translation work and other aspects of the distribution work where package
-usage is interesting to know, they can also be used as indicator of
-overall Debian installations.</p>
+<p>Debian users can configure their system to submit information about the installed
+packages automatically and anonymously.  While the main aim of
+collecting this information is to prioritise DVD contents,
+translations and other aspects of the distribution work where package
+usage is interesting knowledge, it can also be used as an indicator of
+the total number of Debian installations.</p>
 
-<p><q>Since the number of submissions doubled
+<p><q>Because the number of submissions doubled
 since <!-- FIXME:  ADD DATE IF POSSIBLE -->, we guess
-that the number of all installations doubled, too.  But estimating
-reliable absolute numbers is not very easy for a project with an open
-infrastructure as we have.</q> says Debian spokesman Alexander
+that the total number of installations doubled, but reliably estimating
+absolute numbers is not very easy for a project with an open
+infrastructure like ours.</q> says Debian spokesman Alexander
 Schmehl.</p>
 <!-- FIXME: OR SHOULD WE CITE PETR AS POPCON MAINTAINER? -->
 
 <p>Users who want to participate and make the statistic even more
-accurate, should install the <tt>popularity-contest</tt> package and
+accurate should install the <tt>popularity-contest</tt> package and
 answer <tt>yes</tt> when asked if they want their machine to
 participate.</p>
 
 <h2>About Debian</h2>
 
 <p>Debian GNU/Linux is a free operating system, developed by more than
-a thousand volunteers from all over the world who collaborate via the
+a thousand volunteers from all over the world who collaborate through the
 Internet.  Debian's dedication to Free Software, its non-profit nature,
 and its open development model make it unique among GNU/Linux
 distributions.</p>

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