[Debconf6-data-commit] r48 - mail

[Neil McGovern]

Author: neilm
Date: 2005-11-06 23:15:23 +0000 (Sun, 06 Nov 2005)
New Revision: 48

Modified:
   mail/d-d-a_generic-sponsorship-offer
Log:
SPG and readability


Modified: mail/d-d-a_generic-sponsorship-offer
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--- mail/d-d-a_generic-sponsorship-offer	2005-11-06 11:08:23 UTC (rev 47)
+++ mail/d-d-a_generic-sponsorship-offer	2005-11-06 23:15:23 UTC (rev 48)
@@ -1,38 +1,37 @@
 Hi!
 
-DebConf6 will take place from the 14 May to the 22th 2006 in
-Oaxtepec, Mexico. (It is preceded by an inofficial work camp
-called "debcamp", from the 6th to the 13th of May. Debian Day, an
-information day for users, the press and Important People will
-be held (mostly in spanish, and partly translated) on the 13th of
-May.)
+DebConf6 will take place from the 14 May to the 22th 2006 in Oaxtepec, Mexico.
+It is preceded by an unofficial work camp called "debcamp", from the 6th to the
+12th of May. 
+On the 13th May, Debian Day, an information day for users, the press and
+Important People will be held. This will be mostly in spanish, and partly
+translated.
 
-To be able to plan and budget for this we ask people who need
-travel support to tell us as early as possible. This is done so
-that we might take advance of cheaper flight prices and special
-offers you can find.
+To be able to plan and budget for this we ask people who need travel support to
+tell us as early as possible. This is done so that we might take advance of
+the cheaper flight prices and special offers that can be found.
 
-Are you interested in attending DebConf6, but can't afford the
-entire trip? Are you working on any aspect of Debian?  Then
-please register at http://debconf.org/debconf6/register and make
-sure you check the "I need travel support!" box and specify
+Are you interested in attending DebConf6, but can't afford the entire trip? Are
+you working on any aspect of Debian?  Then please register at
+http://debconf.org/debconf6/register and make sure you check the "I need travel
+support!" box.
 
+Please ensure you specify:
 - the area you work on within Debian
 - the approximate travel costs, if booked well in advance
   (accomodation and food is taken care of)
-- how much of that costs are you able to pay yourself
-- your contact info (phone required)
+- how much of those costs are you able to pay yourself
+- your contact information (phone required)
 
-We, the DebConf6 organizers together with the DPL, will apply
-some common sense and fuzzy-logic filters and match the incoming
-requests against our vague idea of how the budget will look like
-and come back to you for further planning and information until
-February 17th 2006 (11 Weeks ahead of debcamp).
+We, the DebConf6 organizers together with the DPL, will apply some common sense
+and fuzzy-logic filters and match the incoming requests against our vague idea
+of how the budget will look like and come back to you for further planning and
+information before February 17th 2006 (11 Weeks ahead of debcamp).
 
-We will try to handle this process in a semi-open way, since many
-are not compfortable about sharing travel dates and intentions
-publicly and might feel that their financial make up is a private
-issue. The "open" part about this will be that the decisions
-about sponsorship won't be drawn by lot or decided on arbitrarily
-but according to our general consensus.
+We will try to handle this process in a semi-open way. It will be kept private
+to some extent as many people are not comfortable about sharing travel dates
+and intentions publicly and might feel that their financial make up is a
+private issue. 
 
+The decisions about sponsorship won't be drawn by lot or decided on arbitrarily
+but according to our general consensus.